(DOCSP-29550) backporting DOCSP-29550 to v6.0 (#5061)

* (DOCSP-29550) more tech review feedback

resolving merge conflict

* (v6.0) backporting changes

Author: carriecwk

source/includes/steps-upgrade-on-prem-with-deb-packages.yaml

@@ -55,16 +55,29 @@ content: |
 stepnum: 4
 level: 4
 title: "Start |onprem| on the upgraded host."
-source:
-  file: steps-source-upgrade-onprem.yaml
-  ref: start
+ref: start
+content: |
+  .. code-block:: sh
+
+     sudo service mongodb-mms start
+
+  .. include:: /includes/note-backup-daemon-will-wait.rst
+  
+  Log into your upgraded |onprem| host after it restarts. If
+  your login succeeds, the upgrade succeeded.
 ---
 stepnum: 5
 level: 4
-source:
-  file: steps-source-upgrade-onprem.yaml
-  ref: rinse-repeat
+title: "*[Optional]* Repeat the preceding steps for all other |onprem| hosts in your High Availability deployment."
+ref: rinse-repeat
+content: |
+   .. note::
 
+      The logs that generate from starting |onprem| service can be expected to temporarily pause 
+      logging at ``Starting pre-flight checks`` until all |onprem| servers upgrade to the same version.
+  
+   If your upgrade is successful, repeat steps 1 to 4 on the next host in your
+   high availability |onprem| deployment.
 ---
 stepnum: 6
 level: 4